Idiomatic phrases, especially ones associated with a specific mood or genre (i.e. fantasy) are often very hard to translate smoothly. Grats on getting it as good as you did!
Apologies for the delay, but I should say thank you for your review. Feedback really does make a difference to the contributors and their humble editors (and we really are very 'umble). I hope you stick around for issues 15 and 16. Exciting things planned for both of those.